As president, Mitt will work to expand and enhance access and opportunities for Americans to hunt, shoot, and protect their families, homes and property, and he will fight the battle on all fronts to protect and promote the Second Amendment.That's the concluding paragraph on a Mitt Romney campaign page advocating gun rights (emphasis added).
As the Huffington Post blogger notes, with tongue in cheek:
Mitt Romney may be pro-guns, but an egregious error on his campaign website indicates that he's anti-copyediting.As the writer says, the sentence is technically grammatically acceptable, but it's meaning is potentially confusing, at best, and misleading, at worse.
The blogger blames comma use, but I don't think modifying the location of commas would improve the sentence. It would be better to rewrite the sentence -- separating the words so hunting and shooting are not used in the same reference with to protecting families, homes and property.
But since I detest Mitt Romney and would never vote for him, I'm not going to aid his campaign by actually rewriting the sentence. If his minions are smart enough, they can figure it out.
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